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Team Awesome - Reborn Leader :Fortress Wars Part3

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Team Awesome now on Tumblr [link]
Part one - [link]
Part two - [link]
Part three - Enjoy ^^

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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

Vision: nice conclusion to a great mini-series.

Originality: as a series, terrifically original.

Technique: Artistically, same as always: simple and appealing.
I liked the bright light as Tia awoke from her dream; and the cinematic-style transition of the wind blowing outside her window.
This comic did seem to move a bit too fast. Drama should not necessarily be prolonged, but Tia's realization->shock->comfort->loving her mom happens rather quickly. This could have been amended by the addition of a few panels, I think.
Faust's expressions in panels 4 and 5 are a bit too joyful. (Unless she was straight-up trollin'.)
The background is annoyingly blank in the middle panel. I know BG's are hard, but it would look a lot better if you added a dresser/closet/poster, or even reused the window in panels 4-6.
Faust's horn in the 2nd last panel appears to be skewed to the left in relation to her head, which appears to be directly facing outwards.
The "Team Awesome will return" text would look much better in the lower left corner, in my opinion: instead of on the art itself.
Also, where did Philomena go from panel 4 to 5?

Impact: This panel packs a lot of punch. However it moves a bit too fast, as I mentioned above, which detracts from savoring the emotion.

Overall: if 5*s were an absolute idea of perfection, this 3-parter would get a 3.5. However, I'd rate it <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star:" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star:" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star:" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star:" title="Star!"/><img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="17" height="16" alt=":star-half:" title="Half Star"/> if 5*s is the best stuff I've ever seen. (I.e. I really haven't seen anything more marvelous than this as far as dramatic MLP comics. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" title=":) (Smile)"/>)