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All you see here is connected to Prequel world that is meant to tell the stories of Princesses, from the very beginning of their lives till all the events know to you from the MLP FIM show and even after that.
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dbarns514 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
thats awsome
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Varyllus Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
Sounds very very good so far. Keep it up :)
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CieloLeAli Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Student General Artist
Oi that's bright.... hurt my eyes to read it bright. It maybe a good idea to tone down the back and make the text glow a lower tint.
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SomeKindaSpy Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
GUAAAHH!!! Why does nobody in the mlp fandom get it?! It's spelled Alhuizotl! There's an "L" in there!
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Necromagenvion Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
Are you really, really, really, really, reeeeeally sure there's an "l" in-between? Cuz the most common use is 'Ahuizotl', y'know.
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SomeKindaSpy Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
Google. It.

The Wikipedia entry says "Alhuizotl".
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Necromagenvion Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
Tested it and found this [link] - Unless the problem is related to web regions.
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SomeKindaSpy Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012
Well, hell. When I google it with an "L" that always comes up as correct.
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mirtar34 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
grammer needs work
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Astiam300 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Everything is great so far :D

Though I think the grammar needs some improvement :/
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Allanpike Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Great start!
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karkovice1 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
I know English is not your first language. Neither is it mine, but I like to think I've become quite adept at it. I just wanna point out some spelling mistakes in the text here, if you don't mind:

1. I think you need to put an apostrophe "s" at the of the word "Moon" so that it reads: Nightmare Moon's return...

2. I think the last part of the second phrase should read: ...Princesses, WHO once more locked villains in the mighty depths of Tartarus Gates. Please note that there is no comma between the words "depths" and "of". There should not be one there to begin with.

3. Third paragraph: I think the second phrase should be worded like this: ... someone they would never have expected to see as their enemy: Discord, THE Lord of Creation; WHO decided... The rest of the phrase looks OK to me. Please note there should not be a comma between the words "someone" and "they". There also should be a "the" before the word "Lord"; and "who" should also be before the word "decided".

4. Third paragraph, last phrase: It should read: Yet even his powers WEREN'T enough... Because you're using "powers" in the plural sense.

5. Last phrase: It should read: ...another foe, one that is willing to control the entire world... A comma instead of a period after the word "foe" makes this a complete sentence. Also, no double "l" in "control"; and you forgot the "the". :)

Please don't take this the wrong way. This is just a little constructive criticism. :)

Thank you for your attention.
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Kaijualpha1 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
Wait wait wait. The princesses defeated Tirek? As in THE Tirek? As in the Rainbow of Darkness, Night that never ends, Midnight Castle, holy s@#$ he's going to kill everypony and everyone you ever love Tirek?

Also, wasn't Grogar merely banished to Tambelon not Tartarus?
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AlphaPegasi Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
busy years for the princesses :)
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RedRadRussian Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
yer it seemed all kinds of shit happened 1000 years ago...
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