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MLP: FIM Rising Darkness page 3 by Bonaxor MLP: FIM Rising Darkness page 3 by Bonaxor
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Third page of my comic.

God how hard it was to paint it....so many details, so much to work on. But Iam done with castle walls and in next part I wont have SOOOO big problems. So next part should be faster this time.

This part is actually page 3 and 4 in one. I combined them to create this longer version.

FOR INTERESTED :D

There are 2 easter eggs on this. One is simple you just need to look closer:D
Second is actually a MAJOR SPOILER for whole story of Rising Darkness. Your not gonna know what it is unless I tell you ;) If you want to know, send me a note.... DO NOT ASK IN COMMENTS!!! And also SPOILER ALERT for those that want to know this secret.

Page painted in SAI only.

Hope you like it and as always BIG HUG FROM LUNA AND ME FOR EVERYONE WHO FAV IT:D

MLP: FIM belongs to Hasbro
Comic and story is mine :D
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:iconwindtitan:
I think that the drawing is excellent. Coloring is top-notch and the panels are well-placed and shaped for the purpose that each one serves. The poses and colors all look natural and easy on the eyes.

I find the words spoken by the omniscient narrator to be kind of arbitrary. "The quarters were in total disarray, like never before." This is already clear through the picture. The words become kind of redundant, and even distracting.

I rated a 3.5 for originality because, admittedly, the idea of the force that corrupted Luna coming back to do the same to Celestia is one that has been done before. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but you'll have to be careful that what goes on isn't cliche.

Overall, though, I think this is set to be a solid comic. Just remember that pictures can create a lot of meaning on their own and you won't always have to explain things with narration. I look forward to more.
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:iconhrp4life:
HRP4Life Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
Warning guys! Luna gets abused even more in later pages. 10-16
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:iconblackrose11a:
BlackRose11A Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
*to panel6* comic author: Yay im in the kitchen,  you want a sandwich?!


*back to coment* i'm sorry but thats why i like the line most horror movise and shows use," Is anyone there?" as if the expect the camera man to saw [above] love your art btw it must be hard to draw tia
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:iconkacript:
kacript Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013
Looks like it's Celestia's turn to go evil.
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:icondarkestsunset:
DarkestSunset Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Dear God, Celestia. Lookit u.
(I'm sorry I'll go now xD)
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:iconderpygal:
Derpygal Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student General Artist
seriously? I kinda feel sad that Luna keeps getting vanished and banished
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:iconnyancat20:
Nyancat20 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
For some reason, this made me laugh.
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:iconfrostthearticfox:
FrostTheArticFox Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
'strucked' ??????
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:iconsilvermoon442:
silvermoon442 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very nice! :O
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:iconkikiwolfheart:
KikiWolfHeart Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
OmiGAH! Why Tia!! Reading them all!
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:iconmayleebell24:
Mayleebell24 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You mean Understand not uderstand... but who care's O wells?
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:iconkisa94:
Kisa94 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
its another typo in there
instead of "what is some attacked us?"
it should be
"What,has someone attacked us?"
had a hard time moving passed that one panel but over all its good
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:iconmayleebell24:
Mayleebell24 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yep ur totally right!
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:iconkisa94:
Kisa94 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
oh wow rlly? :iconsweatplz: it was a guess....
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:iconmayleebell24:
Mayleebell24 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
LOL AHA Yep.... :)...?
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:icontbaransk:
tbaransk Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012
Luna returned from Ponyfille without her chariot.
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:iconcaustizer:
Caustizer Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012
There is a bit of a desolate feeling to this strip (a good desolate feeling). One can only imagine the damage that a possessed Celestia could inflict upon all of her subjects, especially when caught by complete surprise.

It was probably a good thing that you didn't show any bloodstains >_<.

Perhaps it is your passion for drawing and Luna as a character that keeps these comics flowing, but your taste for violent upheaval has caught my attention. Few authors have really done that sort of thing right for MLP, so I will be following you.
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I dont want to show BIG amounts of blood in comic ( only thing that I'm gonna show will be blood leaking from the nose or mounth, or little amount of blood coming out from deep wound.)

Yes Luna is my FAV Pony ever as she is just like me.

When creating first pages of comic I was thinking of making it without violence or with it. The second option won.

And thanks for watching me;)
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:iconxmoo22:
xmoo22 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012
wait wait what... what just happened my mind is in knots
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
What do you mean by that:D cuz I dont get it? You dont understand something or maybe there is something wrong with that?
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:iconxmoo22:
xmoo22 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012
i don't understand why nightmare moon knocked out luna
she refereed to both of them as a good couple
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
First read next pages;).
Second. This monster that possessed Tia, need Luna to do something and he had to move her to right place. If she wasn't knocked out Luna wouldn't go with him.
Third. For me Nightmare Moon is Luna and this ghost combined together. So when ghost is alone he is no longer Nightmare Moon, as he needs Luna to become her.
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xmoo22 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012
First: i have done so already
Second: thank you for clearing that up
Third:i think i understand what you mean in my opinion luna/ nightmare moon from episode 4 season 2 is the best looking

thank you for your time with my conversation
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Np m8.
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:iconxmoo22:
xmoo22 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012
smiley face
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:iconwolfking164:
Wolfking164 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
Hmmm. One thing, Luna seems to be too big. In the episodes she's been in, she's just a little bigger than Twilight.
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Your right m8 but I wanted her to be bigger;)
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:iconwolfking164:
Wolfking164 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
Why? THIS ATROCITY SHALL NOT STAND!
FIX IT!

(:P Just saying. You shoulda gone with the correct size.)
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I know that but little Luna fighting with monster isn't what I wanted. A little bigger Luna fits the role of hero that can defeat a monster like Masarras.
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:iconwolfking164:
Wolfking164 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
-_- Don't doubt the little ones. The unlikeliest people are sometimes the real heroes.
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Hehehe...your right. Like Frodo and Sam from Lord of the Rings. But what can little one do against a god which knows no pain or fear?
Can you imagine Frodo against Sauron? The real one in flesh?
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:iconwolfking164:
Wolfking164 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
Well, yes I can. Frodo is brave at heart. ^__^ Plus, makes for a story thats more interesting. (no offense meant)
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
None taken:D He can be brave at heart but for me the real hero of Lord Of the Rings was Samwise Gamgee;) He saved Frodo countless times, from Nazguls, Spider, Gollum.
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Vashthepsicho Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012
there is a book with a smile drawn?
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
YES your right m8:D
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Rocktavia555 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I'm not reading the rest until you correct your description, and admit you spelled some things wrong.

Strucked= STRUCK
Your= YOU'RE
Happend= HAPPENED (Actually, it works either way.)
Uderstand= UNDERSTAND

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DERN IT I'M KEEPING ON READING
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Iam SOOOORRRRYYY for EVERY MISTAKE:(:(:( I know that i SUCK at writing in english THAT is why iam looking for a person that could help me correct things before i add them to comic pages. Sorry once again:(
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:iconrocktavia555:
Rocktavia555 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
*Giant smile* Pokedy Poke, Shovedy Shove!
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fotland42 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012
I would recommend taking the narration out of the last panel. You've shown Luna's scream, and that it cuts off suddenly, and you've shown the blinding light coming out of the door; I think you should just let those speak for themselves.
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Hmmm...maybe your right m8. Normally I'm writer ( I'm not writing in English) and I like to describe what is going on there. Looks like that comic is different and ill have to trow away such narration and just add MORE pics.
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:iconcaustizer:
Caustizer Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012
Evil Celestia really creeps me out. Good job on that particular part!
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Believe me you gonna be scared even more when next parts arrive;)
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:iconcirdec:
Cirdec Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012
Easter egg is the smile face on the book on the floor when Luna first entered Celestia's room. Silly Celestia, you're not suppose to draw on your books.
Your english is not very good, but your painting IS very good! Looking forward to the next page.
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
That is exactly why iam doing it as a comic not FAN-FIC;) ( but there are next pages havent you seen them?)
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:iconcirdec:
Cirdec Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012
And then I found that the next page already exists, lol.
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:icondogman15:
Dogman15 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012
In panel 9, it says "What is someone", but it should be "What if someone".
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
DAMN I missed that one....ehhh. I read that like 3 times and still haven't seen such mistake. Sorry for that;)
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Dogman15 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012
Is it too late to go back and fix any typos?
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I guess not ( still got blank version without text) but i dont know where are all mistakes. If you see all of them plz send me a Note ok? If i try to fix everything on mu own it will be even worst.
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:icondashiekitten:
DashieKitten Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You need to remember to go back to other comic pages, and post the next page...
Page 3 - Page 4...
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
yea yea i know ill do it right now.
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