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Luna with her first pet. by Bonaxor Luna with her first pet. by Bonaxor
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L - Tia! Look what I found! - Luna screamed overjoyed while entering the room of her sister. Celestia was so absorbed in reading her newest book that she hadn't even looked at her younger sister.
C - What do you want Luna?! Cant you see that I'm reading that book, dad gave me yesterday?
Luna came a bit closer, standing right behind her.
L - Oh please Tia! Just look at that marvelous creature. Its almost as big as my head.
C - Wait....did you just said.... - Celestia immediately turned her head to see a giant spider standing right on top of Luna head.
L - Isn't it beautiful? - right after Luna finished saying that, Celestia screamed out of fear, running out from her room as far as possible from eight legged monster.
Little Luna stood in the same place with big smile on her face. She looked up at her pet saying with joy.
L - I bet she is in the kitchen. Shall we check that my little fella? Hihi.... - Luna left the room and followed her sister's footsteps.
L - I think I'll call you Yellow Dot. What do you think?



Little pic I made today. Its one of my old sketches that I wanted to paint.

As you can see...its Luna with her very first pet, Yellow Dot.

BIG HUG FROM LUNA AND ME FOR EVERYONE WHO FAV IT:D

MLP: FIM and Luna belongs to their rightful owners.
Art is mine.
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:icondirigible-quixote:
First things first, you should be commended for having the guts and emotional fortitude to put Woona's face close to a spider like that. As well, the art is really, really cute. Nothing I say below will change my opinion of that, okay?

Now, obviously there aren't any flaws with Luna - it's really just the spider that could use improvement. There are two main factors I notice about it that could be tweaked:

Proximity to face - I can tell that you were going for the whole "cutesy-thing-resting-on-top-of-head" look, and you succeeded somewhat. However, people in general aren't very comfortable having anything so close to their face, let alone giant spiders, so you're fighting an uphill battle right off the bat.
I think it would be better if the spider were more firmly on the top of Luna's head, instead of being so close to her face.

Spider design - Spiders can look very cute when drawn properly - indeed, many in nature are, by all measure, adorable - and I can tell from the way you drew Luna that you're definitely capable of drawing cute stuff. Honestly, though, the spider needs to look different in order to be cute.

The spider's legs end in these big talon/spike things, which are very close to Luna's eyes - a few centimetres, and the picture takes a turn for the grimdark. The spider is also curling its legs around Luna's face/head in a very possessive manner, and that gives the impression of a very subtle, creeping evil. The hairs around its mouth/pedipalps also need to be rethought, because that kind of bristly, aggressive hair just simply isn't cute. I'd either remove it entirely or make it more like fur. Somehow.

In general, the spider should be more like a tarantula hat in its design. That is, make it rounder, and have the legs be bunched up and hairy (not bristly) so that it's sitting on Luna's head like a fuzzy, adorable toque. If not that, then at least move the legs away from Luna's eyes so that the viewer isn't subconsciously worrying about it.

I hope that helped, and I'm sorry if it came off as a bit bossy. I'm not really a visual artist (words are my craft), so I can't claim to have much experience in the field, but I figured I'd do my best for an artist looking to improve.
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:icondarkomen94:
DarkOmen94 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
He seems friendly enough
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:iconstarlioness:
Starlioness Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
because spiders are the best night creatures.. haha..

*has bad arachnophobia but I love this pic!*
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:iconmegtrap51:
megtrap51 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
Yellow dot is best spider.
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:iconealicaria:
EaLicaria Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
:iconawwplz:
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:iconvenom2204:
Venom2204 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Photographer
That's a big spider.....
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:iconraven-kipper:
RAVEN-kipper Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
IT IS SO ADORABLE I JUST CAN"T TAKE IT *brain explosion*
I demand that this be taken down before anymore brains explode from looking at such an adorable picture.
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:iconorrkon:
orrkon Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012
lol in fimfiction blackwings story griffin the gryphon he killed dots who was meant to guard some gem
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:iconcheezsnax:
CheezSnax Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
:iconmlpthehorrorplz: Spider!
:iconroselucknoesplz: Spider!
:iconmlpfimdaisyplz: Bat.
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:iconheartbeatstildefeat:
Heartbeatstildefeat Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Student General Artist
I find it very weird this came up when i searched "badass pony"
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Cuz it takes a badass pony to allow such spider walk on your head ;)
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:iconheartbeatstildefeat:
Heartbeatstildefeat Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Student General Artist
True
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:iconstargazer1997:
stargazer1997 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
I love you for this .... it is just amazing ಥ_ಥ
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:iconsuperriderrex:
SuperRiderRex Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012
*Gulp*
I have arachnophobia. But this... This is totally worth it! XD
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:iconcyrusarc:
CyrusArc Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012
While I'm partial to her having a Thunderbird, this is very cool :)
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:iconnova20cp:
Nova20CP Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2012
SPIDER!
:nuu:
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:iconteenwolf952:
TeenWolf952 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012
I know I read a comic like this, but I just can't remember the name.
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:iconmass3ff3ct3:
mass3ff3ct3 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012
Luna with a spider for a pet. You know i think that's perfect for her and i'd love to see it in the show
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:iconogrechild22:
Ogrechild22 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw her first pet was a spider!

I love spiders so that's cute
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:iconsleepypichu:
sleepypichu Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
i want a hug!!!
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I WANT IT TOO:D
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:iconbronyforever:
BronyForever Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
"BIG HUG FROM LUNA AND ME FOR EVERYONE WHO FAV IT"

:iconfavplz:
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
:D
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:icondutchcrafter:
Dutchcrafter Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012
I normally hate spiders but for some reason I find this one cute. Wait a second ponies make me lose fear of spiders. Is there anything this fanbase can't do? Thank you for this.
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Thats sooo cool:D You are very welcome m8 and remember do not approach such spider in real life. You may not fear them but you must respect them. Otherwise it will just attack you;)
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:icontbaransk:
tbaransk Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012
alfa995 (the guy who draws 'Ask Nightmare Moon') drew a comic about Luna and a tarantula: [link]

Luna Looks so enthusiastic. I think her eyes are bigger than they should be.
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Hihi... that comic is so sweet:D
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:iconredwinter000:
Redwinter000 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012
*Skitter skitter*
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:iconrarodar:
Rarodar Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
awww its so cute. both the spider and luna.
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:iconilluminatiums:
illuminatiums Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Luna Likes creepy things, so i have no problem with that :D
Cute picture ^^
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:icondoog97:
doog97 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
D'aawwwwwwwwww !!!
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:iconmaginas:
Maginas Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
im with celestia on this one if i saw a spider that big i would probably never sleep again
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:iconmortalshinobi:
mortalshinobi Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
that's quite cute actually. :)
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:iconmikkeleb:
Mikkeleb Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
so much dawwness. i had forgotten about these daww pictures you did. you should do more of these when the comics finished^^
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
COMIC! Finished? M8 this project gonna take me A LOT of time. I dont know when I'll finish it. But I can paint such pictures when I actually need a brake from painting comic:D
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:iconmikkeleb:
Mikkeleb Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
well that's even better. i only said after the comic because i thought that you were going to say that you properbly wouldn't do any more until after. this is so much better:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
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:icondinodude0091:
dinodude0091 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
This is a very adorable picture!

Would it be okay if I used the picture of the spider for a Wiki article I'm writing?
Here's the link: [link]
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Sure m8:D Awesome Idea:D:D:D:D Thanks for that.
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:icondinodude0091:
dinodude0091 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
You're welcome! That whole wiki is actually based around an in-progress fanfic based around this thing: [link]

I'm proud to say that I do A LOT of work on helping out with that wiki: editing grammar, creating dozens upon dozens of creatures to inhabit the world, suggesting names for things that :iconhlissner: can't think of, and occasionally suggesting new locations to add to the map. Here's a link to the full wiki: [link]

Also, I pointed out you're comic thing to a couple of the other guys who work on the wiki as well (including :iconhlissner: himself).
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
REALLY? GOD THATS AWESOME:D I actually created special species of Unicorns that in my comic live on far cold north right under the land of Pingwin. One of characters that is in the comic is from this race. Maybe they actually could add them? What do you think? I can tell everything about them if you want ( you said that this map and whole project is fanfic so adding other fanfic could be nice, probably.)
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:icondinodude0091:
dinodude0091 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
Also, feel free to send me a note with everything you think I'll need to know (race name, differences from standard unicorns, relations to other races, miscelaneous trivia, etc.) and I'll see if we can fit it in with :iconHlisser: 's established canon.
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:icondinodude0091:
dinodude0091 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
Hmm... arctic unicorns, eh? It's possible, after all me and :iconhlissner: agree on Luna's guard being a special subspecies of pegasi native to Tramplevania.

Tell you what, first chance I get, I'll make sure to pass your request/idea along to Henrik and see what I can do. If they're approved, chances are they might not get their own separate page but they'll probably get a special sub-section under the regular Unicorn page. Which reminds me, I REALLY need to add in those bat-winged pegasi.
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:iconvikonaut:
vikonaut Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
That sounds good to me! I never intended on making the Penguin the only residents of Frigus, but I hadn't decided what else. I haven't spent a lot of time on sub-species of the various races, but I intend to go back and incorporate them once I have some more time to.

Anyhow, let's do it! >:3
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:icondinodude0091:
dinodude0091 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
Good to hear! Also, on the subject of possible residents for Frigus, might I suggest the nation of Bearlaska from THIS post ( [link] ) of the Madmax tumblr page?

Population: Bears, mostly of the Polar variety.
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:iconvikonaut:
vikonaut Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
This. It shall be done! XD
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BusyNapping Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
First when I saw it I was like HOLY SHIT, but then I Daaawwww'd.
Cute Picture :)
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:icontheoldhorse:
theoldhorse Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
hehe nice lil pet, you really must meet mine *shows her his pet snake a yellow python*
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:iconbonaxor:
Bonaxor Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Daawww he is so adorable ( Luna gently grabs yellow snake putting him on her back) Can I show him to Tia? I bet she is gonna love his color:D
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:icontheoldhorse:
theoldhorse Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
(the snake hisses and slivers around on her back) hehe found him ages ago, trade i think,
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:iconyemto:
yemto Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I would have the same reaction as Celestia... I hate spiders.
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WiskeyMike1 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
awww cute :D
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